Okay, I join The April Writing 101 in Blogging University (after I couldn’t complete it last year), hoping that I can complete it this year.
Our first task is to write our stream of consciousness in 20 minutes. I had to put my phone in stopwatch mode in order to keep my mind on this task.
I have no idea what to write, so I just write what cross my mind. Everybody else is writing about their Easter-related moment, since I am not celebrating Easter, I just enjoy the holiday and I will write about it.
I went to Garut, in West Java, Indonesia to visit the grave of my fiance’s grandmother before our wedding in this May. I really love this journey because I could see the beauty of Garut and how cold the air there. We went there Friday early morning but the toll road was already packed with cars and the traffic jam was already welcoming us there. The 5 hours journey became 10 but with the green view and nice food, everything is bearable.
Beside visiting the Grave, we also went to Garut for its Leather Market. I had to buy shoes for my dad there. They sell many leather-product with great quality in such a very reasonable price. I spend approximately $40 only for 2 sandals and 2 formal shoes! if you happen to be in West Java, just don’t miss the opportunity to shop leather in Sukaregang Leather Market, in Garut.
We also visit the Chocolatier, another Garut’s finest product. The name is Chocodot, it is known as the first chocolate maker which blend chocolate with dodol (traditional sweet-sticky food from Garut). They have many kind of chocolate with fancy name. They also sell it in a very reasonable price!
The best Holiday is the one which make our tummy happy!
Argh, I still have another 5 minutes to write. I should write about where we spend the night. We weren’t planning to stay overnight in Garut, because we are going to go to Bandung to spend two nights there but because of the traffic jam, we had to stay one night in Garut. Long holiday is not a time to an unplanned stay-over journey. Almost all the hotel is fully booked, with Jakarta-plate cars in the yard. Thank God we finally get room in Familie Ayu Hotel, an old but comfortable hotel. We are lucky, with only $20/room/night!
So, have you ever experience the unplanned journey that turn out to be very fun? please share..
….my 20 minutes is finally over. Yeay!
The DarkJasmine 
yes i do!! unplanned trip or journey is always the best. most if not all. hehe.
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haha.. if it turn out to be a nightmare, maybe it is a sign to rewrite the memory. 😀
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I liked your post. I don’t know if you did it consciously or not, but this notion of progression that I saw in this article was a great idea for the 20 min exercise, and the fact that you added pictures to illustrate your words helped me picture the whole image in a better way.
Now if there is something you can change, I would say it is the feeling of monotony in your sentences. You use a lot of dots, and so a lot of sentences. You could change some dots by dashes (to emphasize something), or even colons when you introduce an idea. And also, there are some sentences you could shorten (which means instead of having an idea in two sentences, you can put those two ideas in the same sentence) in order to create a sort of continuity that would please the reader.
Other than that, nice article!
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Wow.. Thanks for reading… I will work on that issue and hopefully my next post will be much better. Once again, thank youuuu… 🙂
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Wow.. Thanks for reading and the critiques. I will work on that issues and hopefully my next post will be much better. Once again, thank youuu.. I really appreciate your comment.
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Last weekend felt like invasion actually. I was so lucky to get last railway ticket to Bandung. It was packed with tourists, especially “B” plated cars.
Good luck on your Writing 101.
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I have to admit that i am one of those cars that flooding Bandung this weekend.. Hehehe thank you for visiting back and thank you for the good luck, I guess I really need this.. 😀
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So you’re getting married? Congrats!
Indonesia sounds fun. I can’t wait to come and see. And eat. Eat mainly I must say.
Unplanned trips? Not really. I even draw the big lines of my last minute trips. I like the possibility to make something crazy and eventful… inside a frame. I am among those unfortunate people who, if nothing’s planned, enjoy doing nothing.
I wish you to complete this month challenge. I’ll be able to see more pics of Indonesia 😉
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Thank you for visiting back, Jess!
I will try my best to finish this time and more pics will come soon…
If you happen to be planning a visit to Jakarta, Please put “meeting me” in your schedule, It will be such an honour for me to meet you.. 🙂
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I definitely will then. Be prepared, sooner or later, I always find my way to the people who invite me 😉
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😀 I am already prepared! hehe
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I liked your post…I am actually starting mine in a few minutes, I feel like I have to start a timer so I don’t just write and write:)))))) thank you for following, I am excited to join you in this journey:)
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I am excited too! 😀
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when i remember about garut then i will think about dodol hehehe
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Hhahaaa.. That’s the idea of chocodot, a chocolate blend with dodol.. 😆 do you know the new varian of dodol?
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I just read this post – and did not feel a sense of monotony in your writing here. I didn’t even notice that they are mostly short sentences until I read one of the comments about it. Every reader has a unique experience. Your sentences are clear and well-constructed. Writing sentences with varying length is said to make it more interesting but it does depend on what you are trying to achieve with your writing practise. Best wishes 🙂
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I appreciate any comments for my writing and I do agree that every reader has their own interpretation of it. Best wishes for you too.. 😀
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love the simplicity.. xo
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😀 Thank you for visiting back..
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I hope to one day head out there 🙂
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